Last December I went on a family trip to Cambodia where I visited the largest Buddhist temple in the world, Angkor Wat. It was an enormous temple where people from all walks of life were scattered like ants everywhere. I took it as an opportunity to treasure moments of people living in Cambodia and so began taking pictures. Among them, have two pictures of two children one in each photograph. Both are of young Cambodian children who are seated in different places in the temple.
In the first picture, a little Cambodian girl who seems to be under the age of 10 is kneeling at a corner on a wooden drawbridge. She is wearing a light grey shirt that is slightly ripped on the bottom. It is colored with brown and green drawings at the front which complements the vintage-like area that she is in. She is wearing a thin dark grey pants that is torn on both side of her knee which is revealing her skin. She has a wavy brunette hair which curls outwardly making her overall appearance seem like she has not taken a shower for a while. She is hiding her face in the corner as if she is shying away from the camera yet she has her hands put together palm to palm like she is forced to bring money home.
Another picture is of another Cambodian girl who looks half the age of the girl in the other picture. She is wearing a bright shirt that has black, orange, pink and purple colors on it. She is wearing pink shorts that complement her shirt very well and it looks like she had her clothes washed the other day. The girl has a dark boyish haircut with a gold necklace around her neck. She has a coconut in front of her with a size larger than her head cut into half. She has one hand on one half of the coconut and the other on her mouth as she eats a little bit of the white coconut meal from the inside. She is sitting sideways to the camera showing the side view of her face and on top of a stony rampart, with a frown on her face. She has a white plastic in front of her opened and a bit far from her. It is as if she was hungry, she threw the plastic and did not bother to keep it close to her.
Unlike the first photograph, the other photograph has bright colors in fact many. The colors stand out and it makes the overall atmosphere a lot brighter than the first photograph. In addition, the girl in the second photograph is dressed more brightly, with necklace around her neck and some food to eat that she does not seem like a beggar. However, looking at both pictures, they bring about the same feeling, hunger and adversity.
Looking at both photographs, I noticed the importance of our facial expressions. The reason is that even though the little girl in the second photograph has bright clothes on and food to eat, they both photograph being about the same feeling. She does not seem that brighter than the girl in the first photograph. I believe it is the frown on her face. If she had a smile, maybe the story would be a little different.
1. It has a very interesting hook based on the writer’s personal experience. And I think this is very effective to attract reader’s attention.
ReplyDelete2. I’m afraid that the writer didn’t mention titles of two photographs and the names of the photographers. I guess that these two photos might have been taken by the writer herself, but still not sure of that.
3. I think that the writer didn’t use any of photographic term. Instead, she seems to focus on describing the two photos and describe how she feels about them.
4. The writer think both photos bring about the same feeling, hunger and adversity, and I feel that this can be the message from both photos.
5. The writer seems to focus on the differences of brightness. In terms of message, the writer mentioned that both photos have the same message.
6. When the writer described the girl in the second photo, the writer stated “she does not seem like a beggar.”
7. The writer concluded her writing by mentioning the importance of facial expressions. The writer thought facial expressions play a major role in determining the mood of the two photos.
From Jong Beom Cho to Ju Hye Choi
ReplyDelete1. Does the introduction include an interesting hook?
She starts with her personal experience and it makes readers to fall into the writing.
2. Does the introduction include the titles of the photographs and the names of the photographer?
The title and the photographer are not mentioned. I assume that they are her own pictures or she just found two great pictures without names.
3. Did the writer use any of the photographic terms below?
She mainly depicted the picture. There weren't much of technical analysis of the photos.
4. Did the writer anaylze the message of each photograph?
I think she tried to emphasize her feeling of empathy toward poverty around the world through two pictures.
5. Does paragraph 4 explain the similarities and differences between the two photographs?
She wrote about how they differ in their brightness.
6. similes the writer used: Couldn't find one.
7. She concluded by emphasizing the role of facial expression in the picture.